VOCABULARY: These are just a few reasons to explain because travelling within your own country is better than going abroad.
These are just a few reasons to explain WHY travelling within your own country is better than going abroad.
GRAMMAR: Most people are used to think that travelling in their own country is better than going abroad.
Most people are used to THINKING that travelling in their own country is better than going abroad.
ARTICLES: Majority of the time, travelling is a stimulating and formative experience.
THE majority of the time, travelling is a stimulating and formative experience.
MAKE THIS FORMAL: Although travelling abroad could be more expensive, it’s gonna be a more rewarding experience than staying in your own country.
Although travelling abroad could be more expensive, it IS GOING TO/WILL be a more rewarding experience than staying in your own country.
CORRECT OR INCORRECT: Just like culture, food is another subjective point.
CORRECT!
VOCABULARY: Last but not least, if you go in foreign countries, you'll improve your speaking skills.
Last but not least, if you go TO foreign countries, you'll improve your speaking skills.
MAKE THIS FORMAL: This article will argue that travel abroad is cooler and more preferable.
This article willargue that travel abroad is MORE APPEALING/INTERESTING/ENJOYABLE and more preferable.
CORRECT OR INCORRECT: Where one country's travelers prefer going abroad, another's might enjoy what their own country has to offer.
CORRECT!
VOCABULARY: To balance, travelling abroad is a great way to experience new cultures, while staying in your own country is something good for weekend travel.
ULTIMATELY/ALL THINGS CONSIDERED/ALL IN ALL, travelling abroad... while...
SPELLING: First of all, you can find some very adventuros activities to do when you're abroad.
First of all, you can find some very ADVENTUROUS activities to do when you're abroad.
ARTICLE: You could visit city which is different from city you live in.
You could visit A city which is different from THE city you live in.
MAKE THIS FORMAL: In the end, I think there are many beautiful places in the world that we shouldn't miss out on seeing.
In the end, there are many beautiful places in the world that are not to be missed.