The government must be encourage people to live healthier lives. (/)
The government must encourage people to live healthier lives.
Before the decade is out, we probably don't have many diesel or petrol cars on the roads anymore. (ww)
Before the decade is out, we probably won't have many diesel or petrol cars on the roads anymore.
The first method is increase a number of leaflet and advertisements on keeping fit and having a balanced diet. (3 errors - ^/wf art pl)
The first method is to increase / increasing the number of leaflets and advertisements on keeping fit and having a balanced diet.
In my opinion, government play a pivotal role in ensuring people in Vietnam live in a healthy way. (2 errors - art & ^modal)
In my opinion, the government should play a pivotal role in ensuring people in Vietnam live in a healthy way.
Eat plant-based foods that provide many vitamins and minerals to... (S & ^modal)
People should eat plant-based foods that provide many vitamins and minerals to... (S)
One good solution that the government should implement is to banning junk food advertising. (/)
One good solution that government should implement is banning junk food advertising. (/)
However, banning junk food advertisements may not effective in stopping people from consume that food. (^ & wf)
However, banning junk food advertisements may not be effective in stopping people from consuming that food.
This essay will to outline the main solutions that the Vietnamese government can implement to reduce the issue of obesity. (/)
This essay will outline the main solutions that the Vietnamese government can implement to reduce the issue of obesity.
According to estimated figures, twenty-five percent adults in Vietnam are obese. (^)
According to estimated figures, twenty-five percent of adults in Vietnam are obese.
Obesity is putting huge financial pressure on the healthcare system, it can't afford this. (comma splice - make relative clause)
Obesity is putting huge financial pressure on the healthcare system, which it can't afford.
A lack of exercise, as well as poor nutrition, is cause an increase in heart disease and even some cancers. (wf/vt)
A lack of exercise, as well as poor nutrition, is causing an increase in heart disease and even some cancers.
By provide more parks and public spaces, people will have access to more areas to do exercise and keeping fit. (2 x wf)
By providing more parks and public spaces, people will have access to more areas to do exercise and keep fit.
Government should build and fund more public gym. (art & pl)
The government should build and fund more public gyms.
